gethsemane

Just some thoughts:

1. Always ask someone else to proofread what you've written. What makes immediate and obvious sense to you does not always do so to someone else. Be very careful of assuming your intent is clear -- to someone unfamiliar or not neck-deep in what you're writing about, it more than likely is not. Fresh eyes will also pick up on duplicated words, typos, and the like.

2. Eloquence does not always equal verbosity, nor does simple equate to stupidity. Clear, to-the-point statements will serve your message far better than giving your reader an "Inside the Actor's Studio" backstage look at every single sentence. Think of what you mean to say, and SAY it.

3. Somewhat related to the first point, is to always keep in mind your audience. If this is to the police, be succinct, factual, and respectful. The recipient does not necessarily agree with your position. Nor does he have to. This is not the place to argue the crimes of the CoS, but to address the particular instance or concern at hand with regards to Anonymous and the police.


"I write on behalf of demonstrators who protest the organization of Scientology. These protests have been organized as a long-term campaign, and in light of this, I wish to facilitate communication between the [Police of City] and those participating in the demonstrations, known collectively as 'Anonymous'.

These protests are arranged with the intent to inform; those participating have no wish engage in any unlawful acts, and as such greatly appreciate [Precinct]'s help in ensuring no one is actively intimidated, bullied, or otherwise harassed.

One of the hallmarks of these protests is the usage of masks and other methods to disguise participants' identity. This is in no way an attempt at intimidation, but a means of protecting the participants from an organization that is well-documented in its history of harassing critics. Please be assured that identification will be provided privately at any officer's request.

In light of open communication, I would greatly appreciate an understanding of what [your precinct] requires to ensure this demonstration is lawful and safe for all. Some issues: it would be useful for us to have it in writing whether or not we need protest permits, whether or not we are permitted to wear masks (and what ordinance prohibits it, if not), whether or not we are permitted to carry signs, to stand in place, how far we must keep from the Scientology Org entrance, and so on. Any direction supplied by you will be followed without exception.

I would like to conduct a personal interview at your convenience, and will be contacting your office by phone to arrange one."